H********y
发帖数: 311 | 1 This poem is on the dark side. It is probably the darkest one I wrote.
If you couldn't bear the thought of pain and experiences of pain, : ) please
don't read it.
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Heartache Nightmare
By Molly Baby
Indian red rain tears gushing out
Light piercing deep into rib cage
While thunder rumbling
Above conflicted thoughts
Torment crawled out of the tomb
Charging at me with screams
Terrified, I clinched tightly to the corner
Eyes wide open
Watching pain crushing and cursing
I wailed helplessly like a child
But no one came
Leaving me in an empty castle
Accompanied by broken glass
Until a dash of light cracked the door open
The caldron of the night evaporated
Like a ghost
Leaving no trace behind
Copyright 2012 Molly Baby. All rights reserved |
p******e
发帖数: 4263 | 2 zan
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please
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: This poem is on the dark side. It is probably the darkest one I wrote.
: If you couldn't bear the thought of pain and experiences of pain, : ) please
: don't read it.
: ------------------------------------------
: Heartache Nightmare
: By Molly Baby
: Indian red rain tears gushing out
: Light piercing deep into rib cage
: While thunder rumbling
: Above conflicted thoughts
|
L*******t
发帖数: 1598 | 3 写得真好！patpat
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please
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: This poem is on the dark side. It is probably the darkest one I wrote.
: If you couldn't bear the thought of pain and experiences of pain, : ) please
: don't read it.
: ------------------------------------------
: Heartache Nightmare
: By Molly Baby
: Indian red rain tears gushing out
: Light piercing deep into rib cage
: While thunder rumbling
: Above conflicted thoughts
|
s**********8
发帖数: 25265 | 4 沙发
.
please
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: This poem is on the dark side. It is probably the darkest one I wrote.
: If you couldn't bear the thought of pain and experiences of pain, : ) please
: don't read it.
: ------------------------------------------
: Heartache Nightmare
: By Molly Baby
: Indian red rain tears gushing out
: Light piercing deep into rib cage
: While thunder rumbling
: Above conflicted thoughts
|
H********y
发帖数: 311 | 5 谢谢大家！
昨晚弄到4点才睡着，痛苦的不的了要崩溃了一样。
迷迷糊糊半睡半醒之间把这首诗的构想给打造下来，
今天下午把词填进去，修改了4遍，终于写完了。
我自己也挺喜欢，因为这是我第一次写alliteration。: )
In case you didn't notice, C is the letter : ) |
S*****r
发帖数: 356 | 6 Such nightmarish but very vivid imagery in this poem! In comparison
to the sweet charms of your usual composition, I think this one better
showcases your prowess as a poet.
please
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: This poem is on the dark side. It is probably the darkest one I wrote.
: If you couldn't bear the thought of pain and experiences of pain, : ) please
: don't read it.
: ------------------------------------------
: Heartache Nightmare
: By Molly Baby
: Indian red rain tears gushing out
: Light piercing deep into rib cage
: While thunder rumbling
: Above conflicted thoughts
|
H********y
发帖数: 311 | 7 Thanks again! : )
I could see myself maturing in that sense and I am purposely training myself
as well.
Life is filled with unmet needs and imperfection.
Sweet innocent poems always light up my world. I need that dose of sweetness
to assure myself. : )
【在 S*****r 的大作中提到】
: Such nightmarish but very vivid imagery in this poem! In comparison
: to the sweet charms of your usual composition, I think this one better
: showcases your prowess as a poet.
:
: please
|
z*****r
发帖数: 4261 | 8 伤感的也很好
myself
sweetness
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: Thanks again! : )
: I could see myself maturing in that sense and I am purposely training myself
: as well.
: Life is filled with unmet needs and imperfection.
: Sweet innocent poems always light up my world. I need that dose of sweetness
: to assure myself. : )
|
N****r
发帖数: 252 | 9 Life and the human mind are more complex than just about anything
else. You need all of the above to be a complete person.
myself
sweetness
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: Thanks again! : )
: I could see myself maturing in that sense and I am purposely training myself
: as well.
: Life is filled with unmet needs and imperfection.
: Sweet innocent poems always light up my world. I need that dose of sweetness
: to assure myself. : )
|
z*****r
发帖数: 4261 | 10 高
Life and the human mind are more complex than just about anything
else. You need all of the above to be a complete person.
myself
sweetness
【在 N****r 的大作中提到】
: Life and the human mind are more complex than just about anything
: else. You need all of the above to be a complete person.
:
: myself
: sweetness
|
|
|
N****f
发帖数: 25759 | 11 俺替熊兄弟来道个谢。:-)
【在 z*****r 的大作中提到】
: 高
:
: Life and the human mind are more complex than just about anything
: else. You need all of the above to be a complete person.
: myself
: sweetness
|
H********y
发帖数: 311 | 12 是，要有balance
你也是，要有高兴的？
【在 z*****r 的大作中提到】
: 伤感的也很好
:
: myself
: sweetness
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H********y
发帖数: 311 | 13 恩，a complete person!
姜还是老的辣啊。
【在 N****r 的大作中提到】
: Life and the human mind are more complex than just about anything
: else. You need all of the above to be a complete person.
:
: myself
: sweetness
|
z*****r
发帖数: 4261 | 14 应该谢熊兄的人生见解，一语破天机啊
俺替熊兄弟来道个谢。:-)
【在 N****f 的大作中提到】
: 俺替熊兄弟来道个谢。:-)
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z*****r
发帖数: 4261 | 15 乌云下，会有晴天吗？烈日里，会见璇花吗？
是，要有balance
你也是，要有高兴的？
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: 是，要有balance
: 你也是，要有高兴的？
|
H********y
发帖数: 311 | 16 换个云？重见天日？
【在 z*****r 的大作中提到】
: 乌云下，会有晴天吗？烈日里，会见璇花吗？
:
: 是，要有balance
: 你也是，要有高兴的？
|
z*****r
发帖数: 4261 | 17 等着阳光冲破云层
换个云？重见天日？
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: 换个云？重见天日？
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x*1
发帖数: 125 | 18 嗯，车开出去几个小时就可能是阳光灿烂。
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: 换个云？重见天日？
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H********y
发帖数: 311 | 19 你太辛苦了。
【在 z*****r 的大作中提到】
: 等着阳光冲破云层
:
: 换个云？重见天日？
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H********y
发帖数: 311 | 20 然后呢？
【在 x*1 的大作中提到】
: 嗯，车开出去几个小时就可能是阳光灿烂。
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H******s
发帖数: 578 | 21 scary but beautiful
please
【在 H********y 的大作中提到】
: This poem is on the dark side. It is probably the darkest one I wrote.
: If you couldn't bear the thought of pain and experiences of pain, : ) please
: don't read it.
: ------------------------------------------
: Heartache Nightmare
: By Molly Baby
: Indian red rain tears gushing out
: Light piercing deep into rib cage
: While thunder rumbling
: Above conflicted thoughts
|
