a**e
发帖数: 5794 | | k**e
发帖数: 2728 | 2 amen!
tuzi is so nice..
【在 a**e 的大作中提到】
: PDF超过附件上限，只好分成两个文件。
| f******t
发帖数: 2664 | 3 太感激了。。。
【在 a**e 的大作中提到】
: PDF超过附件上限，只好分成两个文件。
| b**********n
发帖数: 1752 | 4 MM再写点新的吧，没完的时候希望多看点，现在又觉得生活里好像少了点什么。。。
【在 f******t 的大作中提到】
: 太感激了。。。
| k**e
发帖数: 2728 | 5 i suggest to re-write the
most plot about the same, including killing wuma etc
however, don't make Ren turns himself in (of course then maomi is not the on
e who would push him in), so they live together for quite a while, have 2~3
kids together
the story on the side of julia still the same, she still made a big fuss out
of this murder and you can see this strong bias in the jury composition.
Several things will make good tensions in this fiction at this time:
1, Ren's self-deba
【在 f******t 的大作中提到】
: 太感激了。。。
| f******t
发帖数: 2664 | 6 呵呵那样的话我需要把现有长度再扩充1/2，而且需要另一种节奏。目前文章的节奏是
纪录几个星期内发生的事情，很详细。纪录两三年内的事情，还要表达一些复杂的情绪
，就是另一种节奏。得好好想想怎么写才行。:) 不过多谢你的建议。
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【在 k**e 的大作中提到】
: i suggest to re-write the
: most plot about the same, including killing wuma etc
: however, don't make Ren turns himself in (of course then maomi is not the on
: e who would push him in), so they live together for quite a while, have 2~3
: kids together
: the story on the side of julia still the same, she still made a big fuss out
: of this murder and you can see this strong bias in the jury composition.
: Several things will make good tensions in this fiction at this time:
: 1, Ren's self-deba
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