i*****e
发帖数: 1862 | 1 蜉蝣 - 五律 - 押尤韵 - 平起 - 平水韵 - 新韵
天虹溶涧水，五月化蜉蝣。
采采修眉艳，纷纷照影柔。
生欣何惧死，夏盛莫言秋。
品贵争朝暮，时稀故不愁。
20140523 ihappie
【不愁，不稠】 | wh
发帖数: 141625 | 2 在leisuretime版回过：
喜欢生欣何惧死。不大懂最后一联。以前学叶芝，最早接触的就是他早期的一首蜉蝣，
最后几句挺有名，他后来自撰的墓志铭cast a cold eye on life, on death;
horseman, pass by我觉得也和Hate on and love through unrepining hours异曲同工。
Ephemera
William Butler Yeats
'YOUR eyes that once were never weary of mine
Are bowed in sotrow under pendulous lids,
Because our love is waning.'
And then She:
'Although our love is waning, let us stand
By the lone border of the lake once more,
Together in that hour of gentleness
When the poor tired child, passion, falls asleep.
How far away the stars seem, and how far
Is our first kiss, and ah, how old my heart!'
Pensive they paced along the faded leaves,
While slowly he whose hand held hers replied:
'Passion has often worn our wandering hearts.'
The woods were round them, and the yellow leaves
Fell like faint meteors in the gloom, and once
A rabbit old and lame limped down the path;
Autumn was over him: and now they stood
On the lone border of the lake once more:
Turning, he saw that she had thrust dead leaves
Gathered in silence, dewy as her eyes,
In bosom and hair.
'Ah, do not mourn,' he said,
'That we are tired, for other loves await us;
Hate on and love through unrepining hours.
Before us lies eternity; our souls
Are love, and a continual farewell.'
【在 i*****e 的大作中提到】
: 蜉蝣 - 五律 - 押尤韵 - 平起 - 平水韵 - 新韵
: 天虹溶涧水，五月化蜉蝣。
: 采采修眉艳，纷纷照影柔。
: 生欣何惧死，夏盛莫言秋。
: 品贵争朝暮，时稀故不愁。
: 20140523 ihappie
: 【不愁，不稠】
| i*****e
发帖数: 1862 | 3 谢谢点评鼓励等等。
另，我的这首五律的立意只有它表面的一层，例如没有采用谐音等等。
工。
【在 wh 的大作中提到】
: 在leisuretime版回过：
: 喜欢生欣何惧死。不大懂最后一联。以前学叶芝，最早接触的就是他早期的一首蜉蝣，
: 最后几句挺有名，他后来自撰的墓志铭cast a cold eye on life, on death;
: horseman, pass by我觉得也和Hate on and love through unrepining hours异曲同工。
: Ephemera
: William Butler Yeats
: 'YOUR eyes that once were never weary of mine
: Are bowed in sotrow under pendulous lids,
: Because our love is waning.'
: And then She:
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